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Act 5

Scene 1: Mantua. A street.

Enter Romeo.

Romeo.

If I can trust what happens when I sleep,

My dreams show something joyful will come.

Love rules my heart,

And I have many cheerful thoughts.

I dreamt my lady found me dead

(Strange dream that gives a dead man to think again!)

And I breathed life with the kisses from her lips

How sweet is love when it is thriving.

[Enter Romeo’s servant Balthasar.]

Ah Balthasar, how are you?

Do you have my letters from the friar?

How’s my wife? Is my father well?

How is Juliet?  I’m asking again… nothing can be wrong if she’s cool.

Balthasar.

Then she’s well, and nothing is wrong.

She rests in Capulet’s tomb

And her soul lives with the angels.

I saw her laying dead

And I came here to tell you.

O, pardon me for bringing the bad news.

Romeo.

Is that so? You’re crazy!

Get me a pen and some paper

And get a car, I will leave tonight.

Balthasar.

Romeo, please, have patience.

You’re getting too ahead of yourself

Romeo.

Don’t worry about it, you’re wrong.

Be quiet and do as I say

Do you have the letters from the friar?

Balthasar.

No sir.

Romeo.

Okay, get going.

And get me a car. I’ll be with you right away.

[Exit Balthasar.]

I hope to be with Juliet tonight.

Let me think about this…

I do remember a drug dealer.

And he sells from a dark alley.

Quite a thin man he is, being poor.

Although the result of selling poison is death,

This dealer will surely give me some for the money I pay up.

Just pass this corner and… Ah!

Why hello! *name?*!

[Enter Drug Dealer]

Drug Dealer.

Who is it?!

Romeo.

Come here, I want some poison,

But not just any old poison,

One that will drop a man instantaneously.

Drug Dealer.

I have what you want, but it would cost me my life.

Romeo.

You’re a sleazy guy hungry for money.

Take my money and use it to buy food,

Water and a shelter.

Forget about the law and give me the poison.

Drug Dealer.

I need the money… but I can’t do it.

Romeo.

Here’s the money, and no one else has to know.

Drug Dealer.

Alright.

Put this in any drink you wish,

And your life will be taken right from you.

Romeo.

Count it out.

That wasn’t so bad, was it?

Goodbye. Go buy food and put on some weight.

I will use this poison out of love, thank you.

[Exeunt.]

Act 5

Scene 2: Friar Laurence’s cell.

Enter Friar John.

John.

Holy friar, hello!

[Enter Friar Laurence.]

Laurence.

Hello Friar John.

Welcome from Mantua. What did Romeo say?

Give me his response.

John.

I was helping an old friend in the city,

This delayed my speed and I was unable to stop at the post office,

Therefore, the post office did not give Romeo the letter

Laurence.

Then who did?

John.

No one, I could not send it off,

Here it is again.

Laurence.

Oh shoot!

This letter was not a social one, but one of great importance,

If Romeo doesn’t have it, this could get complicated.

Friar John, go and get me an iron crowbar and bring it here- immediately.

John.

Right away sir.

Laurence.

Within the next three hours, Juliet will wake.

She will be devastated that Romeo has not heard of these events.

But I will write to Romeo again

And keep her at my cell until Romeo comes-

Poor Romeo, seeking out Juliet’s dead body.

[Exit.]